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His Band and the Street Choir

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I've listed this article for peer review because apparently the prose isn't up to scratch for FA and is needing of a copyedit. However some of the editors I've consulted about a copyedit have said it doesn't need one, so I'm not sure what the FA reviewers are refering to. Could the reviewer of the article also suggest anything that at present would prevent it from passing FA, like prose flow etc. Thanks very much,  Kitchen Roll  (Exchange words) 10:03, 26 May 2010 (UTC)

I'll try giving it a copyedit using a hardcopy and reading backwards. That usually cements the flow. I'll probably have it finished by tonight or tomorrow and will leave a message on completion; feel free to revert any of my changes. ZeaLitY [ Talk - Activity ] 18:56, 6 June 2010 (UTC)

Hi. Many thanks being willing to do a copyedit; it's just what the article needs. Cheers  Kitchen Roll  (Exchange words) 21:59, 6 June 2010 (UTC)

Finished. Only things I'd suggest now are reviewing Wikilinks and the people mentioned (like the biographers) to ensure no one accidentally gets introduced twice, or redundantly mentioned, or something like that. Again, feel free to revert any of the changes, since you know the source material better than I do. I tried to remove some usual offenders in WP:FAC, like "while", "with" (in some usages), etc. Good luck! If you ever get a chance, I'm about to submit The_Real_Adventures_of_Jonny_Quest to FAC. It's a mammoth, but fortunately it's been copyedited several times; a quick glance might pick up on something neglected. ZeaLitY [ Talk - Activity ] 03:17, 7 June 2010 (UTC)