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I know this article has it's flaws, but I'd like an independent view of it and advice on how to improve it.
Thanks, ShugSty (talk) 02:04, 16 February 2014 (UTC)
Comments from Cas Liber
editJust saw this - a few thoughts....
- I'd remove "has a long and illustrious history" - let the facts speak for themselves.
- Remove choppy paras - there are some in the first section.
- Remove the see also