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How You Get the Girl

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to FAC (which would be my first one). I have been significantly expanding the article in the past couple of days and I would appreciate any thoughts and advices on any aspect of the article.

Thanks, Medxvo (talk) 11:11, 11 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Ippantekina

My immediate suggestion is to avoid the passive voice at all cost. Some examples:
- It was written by Swift and the Swedish producers Max Martin and Shellback → Swift wrote it with the Swedish producers...
- Particular praise was directed towards the song's chorus. → Critics particularly praised the chorus
I don't think the record labels are necessary for the lead
- Is that because it wasn't released as a single? I thought it's necessary because there are two different labels for the two different versions. I've also seen some tracks from the 30 album that got promoted to FA status and they have the label in the lead so I was also referencing that.. Medxvo (talk) 15:20, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The current structure of "Music and lyrics" is quite confusing. I think it's best to separate paragraphs between the original song and the Taylor's Version re-recording
- I think you mean the production details? If so, I've separated them now. Medxvo (talk) 15:20, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I can't believe that critics described this song as a "ballad" but the sources do verify this, lol, anyway...
- I was also so confused but I had to add it :P Medxvo (talk) 15:20, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
MusicOMH's Shane Kimberlin, Nylon's Leila Brillson, and PopMatters's Corey Beasley praised the song's chorus, with the lattermost considering it one of Swift's "sing-song" and "indelible" choruses shouldn't this be in the "Critical reception" section?
- Yeah, moved it now. Medxvo (talk) 15:20, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The "Critical reception" section is currently quite all over the place. I suggest you read WP:RECEPTION to work through the organisation and structure. My suggestions for now:
- 1st paragraph: positive reviews, particularly the production
- 2nd paragraph: mixed/negative reviews of the production
- 3rd paragraph: mixed/negative reviews of the lyrics
- Each paragraph should contain a topic sentence.
  - Oh my, I totally forgot to add the topic sentences.... I adjusted the section as 1st paragraph for positive reviews, 2nd paragraph for negative reviews (because they're mainly criticizing the song in general, not a specific part), and 3rd paragraph for the TV reviews. Can you please take a look and let me know what you think? Medxvo (talk) 15:20, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

— Ippantekina (talk) 10:16, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Ippantekina: Thanks so much for the comments! I've addressed most of them accordingly and left some comments above. I will be waiting for more comments from you, have a good day! Medxvo (talk) 15:20, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]