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I Never Liked You

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One of my favourite books, I'm aiming at making a Featured Article out of this, and would appreciate any feedback I can get.

Thanks, Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 02:21, 27 October 2014 (UTC)**

Comments from Tim riley

Not much to contribute.

• A couple of phrases need attention:
  • she tries to spend to with him
  • she tries to talk about awkward subject
• and this was new to me and looks strange:
  • hid-and-side games
• Background
  • The first three sentences all begin "Brown"
• Publication
  • A "New Definitive Edition"… the second occurrence of "Brown" in this sentence would be better as "he".
• Reception and legacy
  • Something odd has happened to the possessive apostrophe in the first sentence of the second paragraph.

That's all from me. Tim riley talk 13:49, 27 October 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks! These should be all fixed now. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 20:34, 27 October 2014 (UTC)
  • "Hide and side"? not "Hide and seek"? Tim riley talk 00:25, 28 October 2014 (UTC)
    • Aargh! Fixed. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 02:49, 28 October 2014 (UTC)