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I've listed this article for peer review because there has been some progress in terms of content and referencing since its first failed GA nomination. Looking for comments and critiques with an eye towards the Good article criteria
Many Thanks, Jh12 (talk) 19:56, 11 September 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs):
- The prose isn't bad; but as always, it could use work. Examples:
- "To sustain an international atmosphere at Le Rosey, there exists a quota where no more than 10% of the students may come from a single country." Make the language simpler: "To sustain an international atmosphere at Le Rosey, no more than 10% of the students may come from a single country."
- "The student body, ages 7 through 18, is composed of pupils from approximately 58 different countries, with 60% of the students being European." Fix: "The student body, ages 7 through 18, is composed of pupils from about 58 different countries; 60% of the students are European."
- "In the 1950s and 1960s, the majority of students were Americans, Italians, and Greeks, in the 1970s came the Arabs and Iranians, in the 1980s came the Japanese and Koreans, and in the 1990s came the Russians." Needs reworking.
- "Le Rosey students in Classes 6-2 (US 6th-10th grade; UK Year 7-11) choose their principal language and continue their studies in French or English." Simplify this some: "Le Rosey students in Classes 6-2 (US 6th-10th grade; UK Year 7-11) choose their principal language—French or English—to focus their studies on French or English."
- Capitalization is the biggest issue here. I see many common nouns that don't need uppercase letters.
- "Rosey-Abantara is considered the most important charity project in Le Rosey's history. The project is entirely financed by the Le Rosey Charity Committee, with costs amounting to CHF 1,200,000 (approximately $1 million USD)." Need references on this.
- "he sons of high society playboy William Woodward, Jr.," According to whom is he a playboy?
Dabomb87 (talk) 02:05, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Several direct quotations do not have refs - for example Le Rosey's philosophy is inspired by what Harvard educationalist Howard Gardner has called "multiple intelligences": needs a Gardner ref, or 1880, the site of the Le Rosey campus was chosen by the school's founder, Paul-Emile Carnal, "a lover of nature, history and the countryside". ...
- Image:Rainier 3.jpg needs a fair use rationale for use in this article or it will be removed.
- History seems very sparse - any chance to expand it?
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:36, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
Jh12 reply:
- Thank you very much for the peer review comments. I don't have time to fix the article at the moment, but your comments will be invaluable for improvements for the long-term push for GA. Looking at the comments, it's clear there are some prose and referencing issues that will have to be resolved. As for Image:Rainier 3.jpg, I'm going to remove it from Institut Le Rosey and List of Roseans. There were several free alternatives available, and I think this one better fits fair use if it's only on Rainier III, Prince of Monaco and possibly Monaco. --Jh12 (talk) 02:38, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
- Glad to be of help. Sometimes a model article can be useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are several on schools and universities at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Education. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 11:20, 25 September 2008 (UTC)