Wikipedia:Peer review/Ira T. Wyche/archive1

I've listed this article for peer review because I am not sure how to take it further (to A or featured class). I hold no illusions that the article is close to either A or featured status, but I would like suggestions on how (if at all possible) to take it further.

Thanks, Eddie891 Talk Work 11:44, 12 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Given the length of the article, suggest expanding the lead
  • Possible to mention how many people were in his class, to put the 68th into perspective?
  • Suggest reorganizing so his wife and daughter are in the correct place in the chronology, or reworking the Later life into a Personal life section
  • What did he do between 1948 and 1981?

Comments

Hope these comments help with improving the article. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:34, 2 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

    • Zawed: Thank you very much for your comments. once I resolve those other comments, do you think I can go ahead with an A-class nom or should I wait? Eddie891 Talk Work 14:04, 2 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
      • Your changes are definitely an improvement. One thing to keep in mind is that for A-Class, you can expect a bit of scrutiny on your sourcing. I am still uncomfortable with the mention of Wyche closely working with Churchill; it strikes me as unlikely for any divisional commander to work closely with the British prime minister. He may have met him on inspections and such like but that won't be the same as "worked closely". Churchill and the generals are all the subject of various biographies - I would expect Wyche to be mentioned in at least some of these if he did work closely with one or more of them. I note that this "worked closely" aspect is sourced to the Military Hall of Honor website; I suspect it won't be a reliable source as it seems anyone can edit it. You may need to find alternative sources for anything cited to the website. I notice Prefer and MacDonald are listed as references but not cited. Zawed (talk) 09:23, 4 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Just a few from me:

  • which one is he in the infobox pic? Add a caption.
    • Done
  • you don't need the bullets for the awards in the infobox
    • changed
  • in the lead, I would say he served on the Western Front rather than a specific locality
    • changed
  • in the lead, mention any commands he had before division, regiment and brigade for example, and that he was an artillery officer, if that is right?
  • in the lead, "Officer Interview Board, and command"
    • done
  • this might be an Americanism, but usually I would say "He graduated on 13 June 1911"
    • changed
  • did he graduate into the artillery branch?
  • 30th Infantry what? Division or Regiment?, if division, do we know what regiment?
    • Division, I think? Cullum is the most specific, and he only says Infantry.
  • the Military career section is a bit sparse on units he served in, and is mainly a list of barracks which doesn't tell us much.
    • again, Cullum is really the only source of information
  • what was a gunner doing at the cav school?
    • actually mounted service school, but still doesn't really make sense to anyone, myself included. It does appear that the school was at some point actually called the "School of Application for Cavalry and Field Artillery" and had a close relationship with artillery training
  • he joined the Texas Border Patrol while he was serving the the Army? That seems a little weird, perhaps he was seconded?
    • clarified, removed texas border patrol, that was from a non RS source that I very recently removed
  • unless a rank is being used in front of a name, it should be in all lower case ie captain and (later) major general
    • done
  • link AEF
    • done
  • suggest "to the temporary rank of major then lieutenant colonel"
    • done
  • what formation was he with on the Western Front, and what battles did it fight in while he was there?
    • he was barely there (for about a month)
  • when did he return to the US, before or after WWI ended?
    • he was barely there (for about a month)
  • did he receive any awards for his WWI service?
    • he was barely there (for about a month), so I as far as I know, no.
  • do we know the title of the artillery regiment he commanded at Camp Jackson?
  • drop the comma from "Forts Leavenworth, and Riley"
    • Done
  • link United States Army Command and General Staff College
    • Done
  • link United States Army War College
    • Done
  • mention that the 79th ID was part of XV Corps when first mentioned (assuming this was the case)
    • Done
  • the combat-related WWII bits seem sparse, no mention of training for D-Day, D-Day itself, or any other battles?
  • mention what Operation Flashpoint was
  • drop the comma from "sent one officer, and one"
    • Done
  • "caused the 44th and 100th Infantry Division Divisions"
    • Done
  • were the corps commands both in Germany as part of the occupation?
  • when did he return to the US?
  • what and where was the 1st Service Command?
  • who or what was Ruark?
    • Added
  • what rank was John C. H. Lee? and link
    • Added
  • what makes valor.militarytimes.com a reliable source?
    • It's a listing of his awards. See here.

That's me done. Nice work so far! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:30, 1 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]