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Jocelin

I'm planning on running the article as an FA candidate, thus I'm putting it up for peer review in order to fix any problems it has, and to obtain advice as to how it could be improved. All help will be sincerely appreciated. Regards, Calgacus (ΚΑΛΓΑΚΟΣ) 18:19, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Overall a nice piece of work, in my opinion. My issues are only minor:
- "...and by the time of the short abbacy of Waltheof's successor Abbot William,..." needs a comma after the "and".
- hagiography should be linked.
- "...later become Bishop of Ross)[12]" is missing a period.
- I'm not clear that the date links are necessary. For example, May 23 and April 10.
- In ``...king himself",[19]`` and ``...Scotland and Galloway",`` and ``the church of St Kentigern".[40]``, I believe the comma/period should be inside the double-quotes.
- "March 15 1175" and "August 10 1175" are missing a comma before the year.
- "September 5th, 1186" is inconsistent in format with the other dates. (The "th".)

Thanks. — RJH (talk) 16:09, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for your comments. I have implemented your changes. I made the "". consistent. The way I understand it is the "". is the way they do it in England, but "." in the USA, and in wiki European articles are supposed to be governed (so I hear) by the latter rule. Calgacus (ΚΑΛΓΑΚΟΣ) 05:44, 1 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 22:32, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]