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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it has potential to be a very good article. Juvenal Juvêncio is very important to the world of Brazilian soccer, and a well-done peer review would help to showcase that more directly. I would be eternally grateful.
Thanks, Jmanlucas (talk) 04:08, 8 August 2018 (UTC)
- Hi, three quick comments:
- The lead mentions a number of Juvêncio's occupations, but the article only covers his football-related activities after 1984. Information about his earlier activities as lawyer and government official should be included in the article as well.
- The article is greatly in need of copy-editing. The controversy section is nearly incomprehensible—as though it were passed through machine translation with no human editing. The direct quotations and some colloquial expressions are particularly in need of better translation. At points Juvêncio is referred to as JJ—I think he should be referred to by his surname throughout.
- The length of the controversy section overwhelms the article. I suggest that rather than grouping all of his controversies under one heading, you instead base the structure of the article on the chronological sequence of notable events in his life, noting after each the reception/criticisms.
- Cheers, Genericusername57 (talk) 02:11, 15 October 2018 (UTC)