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Legacy of Kain: Soul Reaver

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've worked on it to greatly increase its quality from a Start-class. Currently the article contains detailed and sourced Gameplay, Development, Story and Reception sections detailing the game's in-game storyline, its development process and deleted materials, it finish product, and its reception among reviewers. Images are used to demonstrate the article's subject, including an early screenshot, a screenshot from the finished game, and a screenshot to illustrate a point made by a reviewer. Citations are provided and more can be found.

I think the article has greatly increased in quality and I honestly think, due to the high amount of coverage it has received, that with further work it could become a GA article. I'd very much appreciate any further advice on improving it.

Thanks, The Clawed One (talk) 23:36, 15 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

dihydrogen monoxide

"not developed by Silicon Knights due to a legal battle during the game's development" - I think you should only have the really vital info in the lead's first para; leave the legal stuff to later paragraphs, perhaps.
Mention exact release date in lead
There's plenty of good VG FAs out there, but for the best one, look at Age of Mythology (then guess why I recommended it!) for a good guide to layout, etc.
Gameplay/Story sections should go first; before development
"Shifter never went into full development" - italics
"the rights for the Legacy of Kain series were subject to a legal battle between Silicon Knights and Crystal Dynamics" - why? What happened?
"Gameplay is Soul Reaver relies" - is --> in?
"time-activated switches - time does" - need a dash here - probably an em dash (—)
"and is the only weapon" --> "; it is the only weapon"
I'm sorry...I just can't read plot sections. So unless there's something really obvious I'll probably not find it. I'm sure other people will review that for you :)
Reception could do with a review scores table (see most VG GAs/FAs)
Also mention Game Rankings and Metacritic scores
Sort review section by gameplay/sound/gfx/etc., rather than by reviewer
"One reviewer noted the game's block puzzles are similar to the Tomb Raider series." - say who it was, and put series title in italics

Hope this helps! dihydrogen monoxide (H₂O) 00:16, 16 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! The Clawed One (talk) 02:38, 16 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well, the Reception section has a way to go, but as a whole your suggestions have definately led to some massive edits. The Clawed One (talk) 03:10, 16 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]