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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it's almost ready for a GA nomination. I nominated it for a peer review a few months back and got some helpful feedback; I've done what that editor suggested, and I just want to send it through one more peer review before nominating it. In particular, I want to make sure that the formatting is appropriate and that the info is appropriately cited.
Thanks, Anotheronewiki (talk) 18:50, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
Hey I think you have a solid overview and article.
Do you want to add an audio clip of the song? I see that some other Featured Articles in WikiProject Songs use audio clips.
The Background and composition section would read more smoothly if we could connect the sentences and ideas together. It seems a bit disjointed. Maybe we can add a link between sentences with words like "Despite its success, Coppola disliked the song..."? Does Coppola give a reason for sampling "Sunshine Superman"? Could that be worked into the article?
I see the article is linked to five WikiProjects. Would it be worth posting on them asking for feedback as well? You might find someone who is more familiar with music articles.
Overall it seems fairly well cited. --Culix (talk) 04:49, 7 June 2018 (UTC)
- Comments from Aoba47
Cool choice for a project. Here is what I notice from my first read:
- References are typically discouraged in the infobox. All of the information cited there (i.e. the release date, the formats, the genre, and the length) should be located and referenced in the body of the article.
- Make sure to link Imani Coppola on the first mention in the body of the article and use her full name.
- The “Background and composition” section seems rather short. Is there any further critical commentary on the song’s lyrics, instrumental, or overall sound?
- The same section should include information on the recording process (i.e. a prose version of the “Credits” section).
- For the same section, you repeat “the song” a few times. I would add more variety.
- For the “Track listing” section, move the reference right after “CD Single”.
- The “Music video” section should be after the “Commercial performance” section.
- ”Allmusic” should be “AllMusic”.
- Could you expand on this sentence (Coppola disliked the song, calling it the worst song on Chupacabra)? Why did she dislike the song?
- For this sentence (The song samples Donovan's "Sunshine Superman" extensively.), please link Donovan.
- I do not believe the table in the “Accolades” section is really necessary as it can be conveyed in the prose and there are only three items.
- I would combine this section with the “Critical reception” section, and move any information on the reception of the music video to the appropriate section.
- Make sure that everything is linked where appropriate (such as Barenaked Ladies, Fastball). I would look through the entire article to check for this.
- I would recommend a copy-edit from Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors.
Hope this helps. Aoba47 (talk) 02:54, 22 June 2018 (UTC)
- Sorry for my late response! Thanks for the feedback. (I accidentally locked myself out of my old account, so this is my new one.) -DiscoFan4 (talk) 13:20, 9 September 2018 (UTC)