Wikipedia:Peer review/Levels (Avicii song)/archive2

Previous peer review

I am trying to get this article to good article status. Anything I need to fix, change, add, or removed, tell me.

Thanks, Lazman321 (talk) 04:30, 20 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • Ref(s) should not be used in the infobox
  • WP:OVERLINK issues and red links should not be left to rot either
  • Link to the music video in here instead of external links
  • The lead's first two sentences have grammar issues with the commas
  • Too many uses of "it" that are too close to each other; try and use "the song" in some cases instead
  • For consistency, do not use "the track" at all
  • "the song because he wanted to use the sample in a song." this reads awkwardly, you can use "a track" to end the sentence instead since it is not writing out "the track" and is not overly repetitive
  • "He also said that" → "Avicii also said that"
  • What does "their label" refer to? Always make things like this specific.
  • Wikilinking on countries is pointless
  • United States's → US
  • The certifications should mention how many times it was instead, not stating it like they were all separate: "octuple platinum" instead of "eight platinum", for example
  • Are you sure written is the correct term for the video creation?
  • The third and fifth sentences of the third para read like run-ons and are you sure all of this is notable for the lead?

Development and release

  • Track titles should always go in speech marks without the grammar inside and never italicise things that are not supposed to be
  • Fix redirects and dead wikilinks
  • [he] in the speech marks should be replaced with the original "I" text since it reads fine due to being known as quoted
  • "He then mentioned that his" → "Avicii then mentioned that his"
  • "when Avicii was asked whether or not he intended "Levels" to be a big hit, he said, → "Avicii was asked whether or not he intended "Levels" to be a big hit and said," to avoid "beating around the bush", so to speak
  • "He produced 6" should say six per MOS:NUM and who does he refer to, specifically?
  • ""Levels," or rather, an early prototype" → "An early prototype of "Levels" since the former reads informally
  • "on SoundCloud on Facebook," → "on SoundCloud via Facebook"
  • "played in many festivals" → "was played in many festivals"
  • "During this time, on May 4, 2011," → "On May 4, 2011," to avoid writing out the obvious
  • "it was called" → "the song was referred to as"
  • "trailer of the song "Levels,"" → "trailer of the single "Levels","
  • "was released on" → "was released via"
  • "posted a teaser trailer" → "posted a teaser" since they are practically the same thing
  • "It featured the album cover" → "The trailer features the cover art" since this is not an album and the trailer did not disappear
  • [23][24] should both be at the end of the sentence only since it is only two citations
  • "and on Amazon" → "and to Amazon"

Composition

  • Citation(s) are needed to back up anything on the text, which currently reads jumbled due to a large number of commas
  • "that is described by" → "that was described by"
  • Noticing over-usage of "..." within this section
  • "and a tempo" → "with a tempo" and wikilink tempo
  • "Its defining aspect" → "The song's defining aspect"
  • The part from "simple" onwards in this sentence reads quite awkwardly as of current, in terms of grammar somewhat
  • "It is also" what does "It" reference? Specify...
  • "and drums are cut outs. They are replaced by a" → "and drums are cut out, being replaced by an"
  • Again, speech marks are missing for the song title
  • "Billboard has later stated" → "The magazine has later stated"

Critical reception

  • "for its catchy and recognizable synth riff and" → "from music critics for its catchy and recognizable synth riff, and"
  • Way too much usage of "..."
  • Misused commas, such as for the introduction of the AllMusic critic and the Billboard Critics' Picks before the quotation
  • "calls "Levels" a" → "called "Levels" a" since this is past tense
  • "it continuously,"" → "it continuously."" since that is the sentence's end
  • "Avicii's 10 Best Songs: Critics' Picks, "Levels" was placed in" → "Avicii's 10 Best Songs: Critics' Picks list, "Levels" was placed at"
  • "It was put on" → "The song was placed on"
  • Too many uses of "it" within this section
  • Fix red links
  • "as #11," → "at number 11,"
  • The VultureVulture and target to Vulture.com
  • "for making the vocals a cameo," → "for sampling the vocals,"

Commercial performance

  • Wikilinks on countries are pointless
  • HashtagNumbers should be replaced properly, such as number 21 or number three; always writing out for any at number nine or lower per MOS:NUM
  • "2 weeks" and other number issues stick out too
  • "peak positiion" → "peak position" since that is an obvious typo
  • "has received 8 platinum" → "has received an octuple platinum" and do this for any other certifications, following the tuple rules
  • Put abbreviations of certification industries in brackets
  • Too many uses of "it" once again
  • The United States and the United Kingdom should be called the US and the UK on their mentions here
  • Name the Hot 100 chart properly
  • "of December 11, 2011 as" → "of December 11, 2011 at" and do this for similar cases since "at" is obviously better in this context
  • Billboard wikilinked once again; massive overlinking by this point
  • "It stayed on the" → "the song stayed on the"
  • All statements need citations, though splitting three citations to different points in one sentence is incorrect unless it's a large amount like around five+
  • Why are the year-end Dance Club Songs and other chart chart seperately referred to as "charts"? You should change to chart, apart from at the sentence's beginning.
  • "on its peak position as" → "at its peak position of"
  • Name the UK Dance chart properly
  • The last para should be merged with the third since it is too short

Music video

  • "for a concept" → "for the concept"
  • Papahadjopoulos should be used for mentions outside of the first, not Petro
  • "behind the song "Levels"" → "behind "Levels"" since the article focuses on it as literally nothing but a song by this point
  • "created an concept based" → "created a concept based" as this grammar reads poorly
  • "It was then released on" → "It was ultimately released to" and add the full-stop at the end of the sentence
  • "businessman (played by Richie Greenfield)[75] walks" → "businessman, who is played by Richie Greenfield, walking" and put [75] at the end of the sentence
  • "with pictures next to them with people that have faces..." this reads confusingly; do the people sat next to him look like Avicii or their pictures?
  • "and briefly pauses and then starts" → "and briefly pauses before he starts"
  • "starts dialing on a phone, 911." → "starts dialing 911 on a phone."
  • "The music video ends with" → "The video ends with"
  • The synopsis is mostly well-written but are you sure everything is backed up by the refs?
  • "ties into the music video." → "ties into the music video:"
  • Awards table is useless for only two awards; write out in prose

Charts

  • See MOS:TABLECAPTION for all of these
  • The plainrowheaders tables should be used here instead, as commonly done in modern articles
  • Are you sure all of the Netherlands charts belong there; particularly in the middle on the Mega ones?
  • Year-end charts should be split for different years

Certifications

  • MOS:TABLECAPTION

Awards

  • Another useless table; move this info to prose in critical reception

Release history

  • MOS:TABLECAPTION
  • Separate labels properly using hlist
  • Refs should have their own column and be centered

Notes

  • Full-stop should be at the end of the Instagram one here

References

  • MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues with many of these
  • Publisher should be cited when appropriate; same issue with work/website
  • All refs need accessdates

To conclude, this article is definitely in better shape than when I had to quick fail it earlier this summer, though is far from perfect. I did go through as much as a GA reviewer would have, but pointed out many issues that could have potentially lead to it being failed upon review. Overall, I do commend your hard work on this but an issue I did not identify above because it was present throughout is the inconsistency of date formatting; only one format should be used throughout, ideally the one of Avicii's home country Sweden. This article has GA potential, though. --K. Peake 21:13, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]