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I've listed this article for peer review because I am looking for further feedback on this list. My goal for this article is for it to become a featured list by the end of this year. I notice that there are a few images that are missing and hopefully me or someone who lives around those stations can get the time to take a few pictures. Apart from patronage which I can see that most other 'List of metro services' have, the information is not generally given to the public by Cityrail unfortunately. Other than that is there anything else that is missing for this list to become featured?

Thanks, YuMaNuMa (talk) 14:00, 19 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments: This is a very impressive list, and with at least 95% of the stations represented photographically I can imagine the amount of work that has gone in to putting it together. A few suggestions and/or queries:-

  • Is it "Cityrail" per the article's title, or "CityRail" per the captions to the maps? Both forms occur in the lead text.
It is meant to be CityRail. Unfortunately when I first requested the article to be moved, I didn't take in account the specific capitialisation of each letter. In the process of another request to move the article and the lead has also been edited to reflect this. YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:10, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm slightly concerned that the article's title doesn't give any indication as to the location of this railway system. It may be that those familiar with worldwide rail networks will immediately recognise that "CityRail" means Sydney, Australia, but most of us have no idea. As there are similarly-named systems based in other cities and regions, maybe the title should be more geographically specific.
  • Whatever happens with the title, the first sentence of the lead should state clearly where this network is to be found. The words "centred on Sydney, Australia", or similar phrasing, should be inserted after "commuter-based network"
Unfortunately the network serves multiple areas with stations in areas hundreds of kilometres away from Sydney metro so it would be unfair to title the article "List of Sydney Railway Stations" as it initially did. I have however added the location in the first sentence of the lead as you said. :) YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:10, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • If possible, avoid the close repetition of "network" in the first sentence.   Done
  • Why have you downsized the lead maps to 150px? This has the effect of making them look small and insignificant. I also don't think it is necessary to include the instruction "click to enlarge", as this is a generally known procedure for all thumbnail images.
It looked a bit messy and cramped up the table but you do have a point about it looking insignificant. I have up'd to the 250px.YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:10, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the "Lines" column of the table, individual lines are accompanied by unexplained coloured dots. What do these signify? Some kind of key is necessary.
The colour dots are the line's respective colour scheme. The name of the line is respectively next to each dot. I don't know if a key would still be appropriate. YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:10, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • I notice that most of the mileages in the lower part of the table are cited to sources, hough none of those in the upper part of the table are. Is there a reason?
I have added reference in the column header. YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:15, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Who is the publisher of the Rolfe Bozier websites?
  • Be consistent in formats of access dates ("retrieved" versus "Accessed")   Done
  • I am unsure how the two external links actually assist this article.
I have removed 1 external link but the other has each station listed with facilities that are available on each station. YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:10, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The toolbox identifies a single dead link. I can't spot where this is in the article, but it should be investigated.


That's about it. As I have said, a pretty impressive piece of work. Brianboulton (talk) 18:43, 27 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your time in reviewing this article. :D YuMaNuMa (talk) 03:10, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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