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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like some feedback on the prose in the lead section of the article as well suggestions on the structure of the table:. The Rambling Man provided me with some suggestions, and I now believe it satisfies at least the basic standards of a good list article, and am hoping to eventually make this a Featured List article.

Thanks in advance for all your help, Allstar86 (talk) 08:31, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

  • Anything in the lead which is not repeated or referenced later in a list needs to have a ref / cite. I would add cite(s) for the whole second paragraph of the lead. I would also make sure the "To date" in that paragraph is replaced by July 2008 or whatever the date of the most recent update is.
  • The "Not Annex 2" in the first small table is confusing. It also took me two read-throughs to understand what Annex 2 is - any chance this can be made clearer (might also be my denseness / the late hour).
    • Partially Done I'm not sure of a better way to describe states that aren't Annex 2, though I suppose "Annex 1 only" is another option, but also a bit cumbersome. I added the word 'states' to emphasize what these numbers referred to, and also used bullets to mark a clear differentiation to explain the difference between the states.--Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Current refs 4 and 5 need a publisher
  • The first paragraph of the lead is just one sentence - could it be combined with the second paragraph? Generally one sentence paragraphs should be avoided.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:44, 17 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for all the comments! --Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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