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List of Dallas Mavericks head coaches

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I've listed this article for peer review because this article cannot be able to attain FL status until it has 10 entries on the list. The article needs a peer review because of Featured topic criteria 3c.

Thanks, -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:29, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • "The Mavericks play in"-->They play in
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Mavericks are owned by Mark Cuban, and Donnie Nelson is their general manager." Comma not needed.
It is needed, or else it will sound like this, "The Mavericks are owned by Mark Cuban and Donnie Nelson is their general manager." -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I know, I am saying that it is alright for it to sound like that. Dabomb87 (talk) 18:10, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
But it is alright to put the comma there, right? -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 18:14, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
It is a stylistic thing, so I won't pursue. Dabomb87 (talk) 19:46, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "who served two stints"-->who led the team for two separate terms
Leading the team is kind of off because it could also be the players, etc. I added the word "non-consecutive" instead. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Motta is also the franchise's all-time leader"
Motta was mentioned on the sentence before. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, but just because he was mentioned doesn't mean you have to add "also" each time. "also" in this sense implies that "in addition to records previously mentioned", but in this case, records were not previously mentioned. "also" is one of those overused additive terms. Dabomb87 (talk) 18:10, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 18:15, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in the regular-season (.735)" No hyphen.
But why for the rest? -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Those are Compound modifiers, read WP:HYPHEN. Here, regular season is a noun and should not have a hyphen. Dabomb87 (talk) 18:10, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 18:14, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • It would be nice if you could find a free image of an actual coach.
Oh really? I always try to find a free image of a coach of that team. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I was just saying... Dabomb87 (talk) 18:10, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Hey, I found one! -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 18:18, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I am not so sure about the license of the Nelson image. It looks like an unfree image. What do you think, Dabomb87? I am not an expert on these image things.—Chris! ct 21:50, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
You are right, it is not free, and is about to be speedy-deleted. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:02, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Undid my edit. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 23:23, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Oopsies! -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 17:48, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dabomb87 (talk) 17:39, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Article looks good now. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:42, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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