Wikipedia:Peer review/List of SpongeBob SquarePants episodes/archive2
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This article was put up for peer review before, but with only automated suggestions. I hope that editors can give feedback as to how to imporve the article and make it to featured list status. Thanks, AMK152(Talk • Contributions • Send message) 17:11, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
- Avoid bold links in the lead, per WP:LEAD#Bold title.
- Image caption is a fragment so it doesn't need a period.
- Image needs a fair use rationale for use in this article.
- Image could be made bigger - perhaps check WP:MOS#Images, I seem to recall the lead image (only) can be up to 300 px.
- "d twenty-two minute specials." - is that 22 x 1 minute or 20 x 2 minutes? If the former then I'd say 22 one-minute specials. Latter then twenty two-minute specials.
- "Bellow" below?
- Do you have citations for the claims in the lead re:marathons etc?
- " November 9-10" which year? And separate the dates with an en dash instead of a hyphen.
- Worth explaining why each episode has multiple titles.
- Season One etc doesn't need the capitalisation - Season one is fine (as per the main article titles)
That should get you well on the way to WP:FL. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:33, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
- What do you mean by ""d twenty-two minute specials." - is that 22 x 1 minute or 20 x 2 minutes? If the former then I'd say 22 one-minute specials. Latter then twenty two-minute specials."? -AMK152(Talk • Contributions • Send message) 15:06, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
- Nevermind. I know what you mean now. -AMK152(Talk • Contributions • Send message) 15:08, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Matthewedwards (talk · contribs)
edit- Change the lead to
- "This is a list of episodes of SpongeBob SquarePants, an animated television series broadcast on Nickelodeon, an American cable network aimed at children aged seven to twelve. SpongeBob SquarePants premiered on....."
That way, the lead sentence is bolded correctly, the wikilinking of the title is done correctly, and you're providing context to the reader in regards to Nickelodeon.
- "Each season thus far has consisted of twenty episodes." can be simply "Each season consists of twenty episodes." This removes the past tense, as even in 20 years, each season will still consist of 20 episodes
- "A total of 102 episodes have aired to date." Change this to "As of (insert date of last episode to be aired), 102 episodes have aired."
- "The series also had a feature film," Change this to "A feature film, The SpongeBob SquarePants Movie complements the series, and premiered in theaters in the US...", which will remove the past tense, and also state where in the world it premiered
- "Four of the seasons have received complete DVD releases, and half of the fifth season is also available on DVD." Add a reference from TVShowsOnDVD.com
- Wikilink or otherwise explain what a "marathon" is. (Not a 26 mile run, I assume.)
- For me, "There have been many marathons in which viewers vote for their favorite episodes. One of the more notable marthons is the Best Day Ever marathon,[2][3][4][5] which aried from November 9—10, 2006 and named "Karate Island" the best episode ever to date" is unnecessary, but as it is, the em-dash should be an en-dash, per WP:DASH, and you should say who named "Karate Island" the best episode? Was it the network, in which case it could just have been a tool to get more viewers, or was it from a third party media company?
- Use ((tl|Episode list}} to create the episode tables. This will allow for information such as episode numbers, production codes, writers, directors and a whole bunch of other things. This is a pretty important thing to do, because when/if each individual season article becomes featured, the tables can be transcluded.
- If you are aiming for FL, take a look at List of Lost episodes, and List of Degrassi: The Next Generation episodes. They (and other FLs) have a season overview section, which is a table for DVD information. This should be included here, too.
- Follow the style of other featured episode lists and instead of the Headers being "Season one: 1999–2000", just make them "Season one".
- "The season consited of a total of twenty episodes." has a spelling mistake, and is in the past tense. The sentence is not really needed as it is mentioned in the lead, so I would remove it (and from the prose of the rest of the seasons).
- "However, the aforementioned episode..." Don't start a sentence with a conjunction.
- Remove the Feature film section, as it is not an episode. You can link to it in the See also section
- I see the DVD section at the bottom of the page. This is what I meant above regarding an overview section. There seems to be conflicting information too, in that the episode numbers do not add up.
- I'm not convinced the shorts and crossovers are actual episodes, and might be better moved to a new page.
That's all I have for now until these comments have been addressed, then I'll take another look. -- ṃ•α•Ł•ṭ•ʰ•Ə•Щ• @ 00:00, 28 April 2008 (UTC)
- I've noticed a notice on the article's talk page requesting screenshots be included to improve it's quality. I would remove this, because they will all be fair-use images, and if only 4 are added it will get the page failed at WP:FLC. No other featured episode list has them anyway. -- ṃ•α•Ł•ṭ•ʰ•Ə•Щ• @ 01:02, 28 April 2008 (UTC)