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List of Tokyo Mew Mew chapters

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to get feedback on whether it is ready for an FLC or not.

Thanks, -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 00:26, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've moved the information about the naming of the chapters up, as it looked a bit clunky by itself. Aside from that, I think the line breaks require more pink, to match the Tokyo Mew Mew template. -Malkinann (talk) 11:19, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Wow, I didn't even notice the color. Adjusted to match the pink which is also used in the ep list. :) -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 19:39, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Move the anime notice into the second paragraph. My biggest quibble is that the summaries are huge. From a quick skim of the summaries, I can tell that they probably can be reduced. I've never read or watched this series, so I don't know how plot-intensive it is, but even for a plot-intensive series, these summaries are a tad big. Condense events, eliminate extraneous details, and remember that the reader doesn't need every last detail of the series. And even past this, a general copy-edit would be good. Also, are the chapter names given in English for the original Japanese release? If not, then the kanji and romanji are necessary. — sephiroth bcr ^(converse) 09:28, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Anime notice moved. As noted in the lead, the chapters are unnamed in the original Japanese, Tokyopop created names for the story itself then names for the extras. Not sure how to reflect that in the table. Maybe put something like Chapter x-y: English name? The plots have all been cut down a couple of times so far, with the last run taking them from above 500 to below 400. I can try reducing again, but yeah the series does pack quite a few events in each volume. -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 16:16, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have gone through and shortened all of the summaries again. Most are now near or below 300, with the longest ones now at 327 and 330, being the A La Mode summaries (mostly from all the names being tossed around). Is this better? (I also got in the chapter numbers) -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 01:59, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"Note: In the first releases of the manga, Tokyopop misspells this as chimera anima, but they corrected it to chimera anima in later volumes." - is it just me, or is the wrong spelling the same as the right spelling? -Malkinann (talk) 22:57, 29 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Woops, what happens when you get too happy with the search replace :P Fixed. -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 00:43, 30 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

What's the proper plural of chimera anima? --Malkinann (talk) 04:34, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Chimera animas :) -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 05:28, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Weird. Is Mew Mew Project a proper noun? --Malkinann (talk) 06:07, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

No, fixed that one. Mew Project, referring to the project to make the Mew Mews is official, but the second use on the list meant a new "mew mew project" as in making a new Mew Mew. -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 06:13, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]