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I've listed this article for peer review because the article recently failed at FAC. I would like this peer review to addresss any issues that exist with the article so that it is ready for another shot at FAC. Cheers, NapHit (talk) 23:15, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "Liverpool Football Club is an English professional football club that is Britain's most successful in Union of European Football Associations (UEFA) competitions. " not keen, maybe "Liverpool Football Club, an English professional football club, is Britain's most successful team in Union of European Football Associations (UEFA) competitions. "
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead image caption needs a full stop.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Actually, wondering if we could think about an infobox (there are quite a few of these European articles for English clubs), could include wins in trophies, last win, most recent win etc, what do you think of that bad boy idea?
Had a go at creating an infobox, but not sure I've done it right. NapHit (talk) 19:07, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "are related to a " or do they have clear qualification criteria every season? (related to just sounds a bit woolly).
changed should read better NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Liverpool" appears ten times in twelve sentences in the lead. Would suggest you mix it up a bit, be creative with "the club" etc, so this isn't a problem.
Changed a few to they and the club. NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "see Uefa#UEFA_competitions." would pipe-link it so you don't have the horrible hash/underscore.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • " It is the most prestigious European competition " qualify it as a football competition, and you may need more than just one paper source to claim it as the "most prestigious".
  • Fairs Cup sentence sort of breaks the flow about LFC being in the second division.
  • "there have been more competitions inaugurated" -> "more competitions have been inaugurated"
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The first was the UEFA Super Cup, which was a competition for the winners of the European Cup and Cup Winners' Cup" not really a "competition", more a match and would say, "The first, the UEFA Super Cup, was a ..."
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link Bill Shankly.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "was the first time that the club wore their all-red strip." ever? In europe? that year?
According to my books it was ever, so I will make this clearer. NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Bill Shankly retired " no need to repeat Bill.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • " Hungarian side Ferencváros on the away goals rule. " ref?
  • Paisley gateway image caption needs a full stop.
done 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
  • "Joe Fagan retired after the 1984–85 season and was succeeded by Kenny Dalglish " Fagan and Dalglish's first names not needed.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "accepted back" allowed to compete.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • UEFA cup image caption needs a full stop.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Amicizia means "friendship" in Italian" ditto.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • " tie was played, Roy Hodgson was" -Roy
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is ¤ something a screen-reader can say?
I've removed it and just left W and RU, without the symbols. NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 73 needs an en-dash, check others.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:12, 19 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Lemonade51

Just two minor quibbles, otherwise very legible...
  • "Benítez left the club at the end of the 2009–10 season" - Would it be nessasary to add on what terms he left the club seeing as Rafa had a very good European record? He left by mutual consent so you could slip that into the sentence if you want.
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Liverpool and Arsenal lining up before their match in the quarter-finals of the 2007–08 UEFA Champions League", maybe you could rephrase that? Something like, "Liverpool and Arsenal players line up prior to the UEFA Champions League quarter-final, first leg match at the Emirates Stadium in April 2008."
done NapHit (talk) 22:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

— Lemonade51 (talk) 20:40, 20 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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