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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring this article to GA status. As I am familiar with American English, I would like someone to check if this article was done in New Zealand English or not (as Lorde is a New Zealander).
Much appreciated, Simon (talk) 14:39, 9 September 2014 (UTC)
Comments from SNUGGUMS
Before taking this to GAN, here's some comments.....
- Lead
- Her musical content doesn't really need to be described here, should just be in body.
- I think that the musical content is needed. Simon (talk) 07:19, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
- "Lorde's music are styled in the subgenres of"..... reads awkwardly, try "Lorde's music consists of"
- There you go. Simon (talk) 07:19, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
- "typical teen" seems rather biased
- How about "familiar"? Simon (talk) 07:19, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
- Life and career
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- Early life and career beginnings
- Include her siblings' names
- Aside from the use of "Ella Marija Lani Yelich-O'Connor", she should be referred to as "Lorde" as opposed to "Yelich-O'Connor"
- Alright. Simon (talk) 07:19, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
- Artistry
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- Musical style
- "The critic Paul Lester from The Guardian"..... reads awkwardly
- Removed "the critic". Simon (talk) 07:19, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
- Personal life and Image
- The first paragraph contains so little detail that it's probably best incorporated into her "life and career" section, and rename this section "Public Image".
- "From late 2013"..... In
- Since this does not mention or even make references to Rihanna explictly, you should include the referral link as well if giving detail on her.
- "She explains her disdain towards women wearing sexy lingerie and opining that"..... has expressed disdain, replace "and" with a comma, "sexy" is POV
- "despite the fact she is too young to vote" → "despite not being eligible to vote"
- "The American singer" is unneeded in "The American singer Britney Spears named Lorde"
- Awards and nominations
- This section right now is entirely blank aside from a referral link. Write a paragraph or two talking about her major achievements like Grammy Awards and MTV Video Music Awards, perhaps some detail on her commercial success as well.
Overall, not a bad article. Snuggums (talk / edits) 06:27, 11 September 2014 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments. I have done all (except the "awards" part). Simon (talk) 12:02, 19 September 2014 (UTC)
- Happy to help, though you still haven't fixed up the section for public image. Her school life belongs in career section, and her dating life as well since there's not enough information on that to have its own section. Snuggums (talk / edits) 19:37, 20 September 2014 (UTC)