Wikipedia:Peer review/McBride & the Ride/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel that it can get to GA class with a bit of work. I started this article a long time ago and have been constantly adding to it. There isn't much to say about their musical stylings that I can find, and I've had a very hard time finding critical reviews outside Allmusic and Entertainment Weekly.

Thanks, Ten Pound Hammer and his otters • (Broken clamshellsOtter chirpsHELP) 22:17, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Giggy

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  • The infobox lists a lot more members than the lead... odd discrepancy (says when he's only read one paragraph of lead)
    • After reading some more... maybe say it initially consisted of those guys in the first paragraph?
  • "These albums also produced" - why the also?
  • "Brown then introduced"
  • "failed to chart entirely"
  • "produced their first music video" - the song was the producer of the video? :) reword
  • The article basically reads as a discography; album X was released on date, singles X Y and Z were released and charted as follows. Is there nothing more to be said about the band's career? (biography not discography)
  • Overuse of also in the third music career paragraph
  • "In September 2000, Herndon decided to re-unite with McBride and Thomas after meeting them" - after meeting them when/where/why? Sentence ends very awkwardly
  • "Since then, McBride became the bass guitarist in Brooks & Dunn's road band." - don't mix past and present tense in the one sentence
  • In general it feels like there's more content available to be used. Just a gut feeling. Hope this helps... Giggy (talk) 01:17, 9 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Meh, I'm trying. Most of their career was before the Internet as we know it existed, so there aren't a ton of web sources available. All of the members in the infobox are indeed listed in the lead, check the paragraph where it mentions the added members. I haven't found out when or why they reunited, even tho that was much more recently. Ten Pound Hammer and his otters • (Broken clamshellsOtter chirpsHELP) 01:44, 9 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]