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Metamorfoz

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it has all the necessary information needed. Please consider that the subject of the article (musical album) was released in late december 2007, so this what so far could be collected on the subject and the article will expand as time passes. Please also note that the artcile was significantly expanded using the Hungarian version, which is a featured article in the Hungarian Wikipedia.

Thanks, Teemeah Gül Bahçesi 19:57, 9 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Hello, some comments from me bearing in mind a possible push to GA and beyond.

• Use the {{Cite web}} template for an enhanced and more uniform appearance for the citations. Y Done
• Perhaps worth stating in the lead that Tarkan is a Turkish singer, not a band or anything. Y Done
• I'd suggest "sixth" and "seventh", not 6th, 7th etc. Y Done
• Citations are best in numerical order - e.g. in the lead you have [3][1] so reorder them. Y Done
• " 25 December, 2007 " and "25th December", 2008" - be consistent and avoid "st" etc. Y Done
• "equals a diamond award" don't like that phrase, perhaps something like "gaining diamond certification"? Y Done
• WP:HEAD suggests not using "The" as in "The songs", "The album" etc. Just "Songs" "Album" is fine etc. Y Done
• "Tarkan denied all previous news" -what news? Y Done
• "this image has not yet been familiar for fans, which also justifies the title" reads strangely to me... Y Done
• The discussion over the songs is alright, I suppose, but borders on trivia really.
• Per WP:CITE, avoid spaces between punctuation and citations. Y Done
• "hihg " typo - check the whole article for others. Y Done
• "TTNetMüzik" or "TTNet", or are they different? Y Done
• "the same exact shiny " exact is redundant here. Y Done
• "Then, according to the official website, he is about to perform " not great English. Y Done
• Criticism section should really be trimmed down and converted to prose rather than a bunch of bullet point quotations.
• " don't know anything baout " - avoid "don't" - use "do not" and another typo... Y Done
• There's a mix of British and US English. Pick one and stick with it. Y Done
• "a short thanking note " again, not great in English. Y Done

In general it could do with a thorough copyedit (perhaps see if WP:LOCE can help) before it could be submitted at WP:GAN... All the best. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:52, 17 March 2008 (UTC)

Thank you, I will try to follow your suggestions. --Teemeah Gül Bahçesi 19:05, 17 March 2008 (UTC)