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Michael Collins (astronaut)

Just did a complete rewrite of the article. Looking for an outside opinion on how it might be improved or anything else needed to get it to an FA. Evil Monkey - Hello 03:29, 16 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Needs trimming, as Wv said. If there's main articles for Apollo 11 and Gemini 10, you don't need two huge paragraphs paraphrasing them. That would drop it in size. Icky redlinks, but I guess they can't be helped. Proto||type 15:32, 16 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I removed the whole paragraph that basically a summary of Gemini 10 and removed some unspecific to Collins stuff from the Apollo 11 section. Agree about the red links - someone needs to go and write some articles about closed air force bases and defunct Air Force wings. Evil Monkey - Hello 20:07, 16 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

See WP:LEAD; you're missing a paragraph about his post-space career, which is substantial. Kaisershatner 19:55, 16 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Evil Monkey - Hello 20:07, 16 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]