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I first made an attempt at GA review on one of the most frustrating prehistoric animals there is, something which unfortunately failed. As obviously, no one had done the same on Kronosaurus, I am asking this time for a review of the article before proceeding with a second GA attempt later. I thank in advance anyone who will do so, best regards. Amirani1746 (talk) 22:15, 27 October 2024 (UTC)
Airship
editThe GA review seemed to focus primarily on issues with sourcing and prose quality. I am not knowledgeable about this topic area, so I cannot comment on the former; I can however comment on the latter. Firstly, the two web sources are not correctly cited; if you remove the years from their inline citations it should be fixed. Please download User:Trappist the monk/HarvErrors to see these errors yourself.
On the prose itself, I think a submission at WP:GOCE would be helpful. There are many very small grammatical errors remaining in the article, along with lots of duplication (it is for example mentioned several times that preparations for the new fossils are still to be prepared or described). Take the following, non-exhaustive list:
- "When the material kept in Karlsruhe had the preparation finalized"
- "The rostrum measure 60 cm (24 in) long and contain three broken teeth."
- The "Size" subsection keeps saying "increased/decreased the length of the specimen"—which doesn't make sense in the slightest. The specimen was however long it was—you cannot increase or decrease that. What you can increase or decrease are proposals, but you can also assume that any literate person knows that 10 is smaller than 12, and so you can replace "further reduced the size of this specimen to between" with "proposed a size of...".
- "Some researchers also suggests that"
- "The neural tubes are visibly oval in shape" as opposed to ... metaphorically oval?
- "the articulations of the ribs with the latter which are quite particular" ... quite particular? what does that mean?
You also need to keep WP:MTAU in mind, specifically WP:ONEDOWN. You should expect to write this article to secondary-school level. At present, it is significantly above that. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:57, 31 October 2024 (UTC)