Wikipedia:Peer review/Navenby/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I would like to polish it up to the highest standard possible.


Thanks, Seahamlass (talk) 15:33, 10 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Seahamlass, here are some comments which may help you on your quest for one of those little bronze stars...!

  • Per WP:HEAD, you should avoid over-capitalising, so "Early History" should be "Early history" etc.*:  Done
  • Any chance of making the co-ordinates at the top of the page read in degrees, minutes, seconds with a N for north and W for west? I think you can modify it to be coords dms if memory serves...Sorry: Really sorry, can't work out how to.
  • The WP:MOS#Images recommends that you don't "squeeze" text between two images. With thirty images on this page, it's probably over-illustrated so try to avoid having images squashing the text.*:  Done
  • "Chapel Lane" - why italics? same with all the other italics in the early history section, is there a good reason for using italics here? Reply: Sorry - thought I had to do that to street names, have now removed the italics*:  Done
  • Curiously, despite my previous point, I would think that "Nafni+by" should be, at least, in quotations perhaps also italicised.*:  Done
  • "October 17th" - October 17 or 17 October, but ditch the "th" - see WP:DATE.*:  Done
  • Ref [15] is used twice for the quote, no need.*:  Done
  • Image:Stpeterchnav.jpg you say you have written permission to use this. Does Wikipedia also have that written permission? *:  Done Reply I have written permission for all the photos used. I'm happy to pass that on to Wikipedia, but not sure how to do that.--Seahamlass (talk) 16:45, 21 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • RAF wasn't formed until 1 April 1918, so the fledgling RAF didn't exist in 1917...*:  Done Changed to the Royal Flying Corps and the Royal Naval Air Service.
  • Argh, "WW1"? Generally British English would refer to this as the "First World War".*:  Done!
  • "8 for World War Two" - "eight for the Second World War"*:  Done
  • Ensure that image captions which are fragments don't have full stops and image captions that are grammatically complete sentences do have a full stop.*:  Done
  • Does Wikipedia have permission to use Image:Navenbywitch.jpg?*:  Done Reply Yes, I have an email from the Portable Antiquities Scheme, granting me permission to use it on Wikipedia.
  • Governance paragraph has several short paragraphs, could do with merging them to make the prose flow better.
  • Not sure of the style of these articles but in the topography section , I'm really not keen on the in-line link to geographical co-ordinates. Reply: I don't like it either much, but I have noticed in other peer reviews that editors have been told to put it in, so I think I had better keep it.
  • No spaces between citations please, so [36] [37] needs adjustment.*:  Done
  • Not sure I understand your source for climate statistics, "Source: MSN Years on Record: 11"? Can you clarify?*:  Done Changed and simplified.
  • "next 5 years " five years.*:  Done
  • Can you link to something relevant for "Grade II listed" and be consistent with II-listed and II listed.*:  Done
  • "It is allegedly ..." something like "It is claimed to be..." with appropriate citations would be more encyclopaedic.*:  Done
  • Numerical ranges should be separated with an en-dash, not a hyphen, so "aged 5-15" should be "aged 5–15".*:  Done
  • "rate was 3" - 3 isn't a rate, it needs a "per..."*:  Done
  • "20.18 km" - use the convert template for the imperial-ists amongst us.*:  Done
  • "now 47.9% do" - now? needs context, like, As of March 2008, ...*:  Done
  • 1859/60 - 1859–60. There are others...*:  Done - Several anyway!
  • "1832.[63]x " - what's the x?*:  Done Random character removed!
  • Avoid bullet point lists in potential FA's when prose would be better.Fixed them.*:  Done
  • Culture and community section could use some work on prose, merging paragraphs, reducing the over illustration.*:  Done: Took out a couple of pictures, merged paragraphs, removed bullet points etc.
  • Shouldn't Under 11 be Under-11? Not sure myself...*:  Done Looks better like this anyway!
  • "Tracey Duxbury " - again, why italics? *:  Done Correcte - italics removed.
  • Trim the external links to those directly relevant.*:  Done

That's a good start for you. Let me know if you need anything more from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:11, 20 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]