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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like if people could leave comments on how to improve this page and make contributions where they see nessessary. The main section I believe needs improving is the opener as its pretty vague and undetailed. I would really appreciate any help I could get to hopefully to get this article to be a FL.
Thanks, KaneZolanski (talk) 00:40, 6 August 2013 (UTC)
Comments from Wikipedian Penguin: I was asked to comment, so here are some suggestions for improvement.
- I see an issue with the sourcing. Discogs is not a reliable source, and neither are Young Money HQ, Hip Hop Press, IMDB, Video Static, or Hip Hop Canada. These are just examples.
- Citation formatting could be much more consistent. Be sure to add works, publishers, dates and retrieval dates for all online references and be consistent with regard to linking works and publishers (first occurrence v. all the time).
- The lede/lead will need a good copy edit (for example, film titles, "Billboard" and other magazines should be italicized). There are various parts that need to be improved (eg. "animation movie" should be "animated film").
- An overall cleanup of the lede will be important. Avoid trivia like "Minaj was sued a fee of $11,589 by Hollywood Exotic Car Rental for unpaid rental charges, property damage, and punitive damage for the use of the pink Lamborghini Aventador which appeared in the 'Massive Attack' video."
- Avoid comma splice and replace with periods and semi-colons as needed.
- This constitutes original research: "With the latter, as of July 2013, having over 340 million views on Youtube and being the most viewed solo performance video for any black artist in history. Minaj has accumulated over 1 billion views on Youtube, making her the most viewed female rapper of all time." It is also crufty.
- My advice would be a more "even" discussion of her videography in the lead. You discuss some of her music videos in detail, but ignore her documentaries, TV appearances and commercial endorsements.
- Have multiple even sized paragraphs (two to three) for a proper and more informative presentation.
- Make sure the title column in "as a featured artist" is sortable.
- There are some recently promoted exemplary articles you can follow and see what the editors for those lists have done: Rihanna videography, Justin Timberlake videography and Madonna videography.
Hope these help. Try finding a good copy editor or see if the editors at WP:GOCE are willing to help. Good luck. —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 09:50, 4 September 2013 (UTC)