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Odyssey Number Five

I'm contemplating going to FAC, but it was suggested last time around that I go to PR first. Seems like a good idea, and thus here I am. Any and all suggestions appreciated. — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 04:04, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

M3tal H3ad

Australia (what a great country!) is linked twice in the first sentence
- Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The album spawned several successful singles and contributed songs to various films. Lead single "My Happiness" reached #4 on the ARIA Singles Chart and becoming the group's most successful single to date. The song was also awarded the ARIA award for Single of the Year in 2001, and was #1 on the Triple J Hottest 100, 2000. "My Kind of Scene" charted on the New Zealand singles chart, ahh!
- I'm not sure I'm getting your point here ;) Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
highly successful at the ARIA Music Awards of 2001 - highly successful could be considered an opinion
- Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review)
with what interviewer Geoff Nicholson described - is what a magazine or did you forget to remove it?
- I wasn't aware it's necessary to include the magazine name every time...in any case, I added it. — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  - Oh you don't need to i just read the sentence wrong :X. M3tal H3ad (talk) 09:05, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
that lyrics like "For every step you’re further away from my love/I grow more unsteady on my feet" on "Waiting for the Sun" - i don't think you need an exert from the lyrics for copyright and to reduce the number of quotes
- Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
As with previous works - what works? albums, singles, DVD's, say something like as with the band's two previous albums etc
- Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
the lyrics were generally more simplistic than previously - opinion
- Source added. — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
something they somewhat neglected in Internationalist, first mention of the album
- Nope, check the paragraph above. — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Like Powderfinger's previous album Internationalist, second mention has a proper introduction (previous album + wikilink)
- Yeah, it's already been introduced. — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The track "Like a Dog" attacked former - a song attacking someone? :O
- Hax. :P Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Four singles were released in total from the album - no need for "in total"
- Done — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The track was written for the 2006 film Mission: Impossible II, - Number 3 came out in 2006, number 2 was 2000 ;p
- I blame Spebi. Done— Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

M3tal H3ad (talk) 07:39, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks mate :) — Dihydrogen Monoxide _(Review) 07:52, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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