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Philadelphia Phillies team records

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm going to make a push for WP:FL with it. I've decided to do this first rather than going straight to the FLCs because this list is quite a different format from the usual lists that I make. All input is welcome. Thank you! KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 21:12, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from NapHit (talk · contribs)

"The Philadelphia Phillies have played in 125 seasons in Major League Baseball" I would change played to participated to make it flow a little better
- Y Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:11, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Leave a space between the numbers and symbols when these are used
- There's a reason for this, but no time now... will address later. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:11, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - OK, the reason is so that there are no line breaks in cells at lower resolutions. In addition, this is the way I've been doing symbols in my other FLs. I personally think it's ok, but it's my opinion. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 03:03, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Could the first two notes be placed in the key section would probably make more sense
- Definitely. Y Done. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 17:11, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Overall looks pretty good well done NapHit (talk) 15:48, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Agree this looks pretty good.

I wondered if there were some team photos that could be used for the team records sections? Any team photo before 1923 would be PD-Old presumably.
- I've found 1904 and 1915 team pictures on the Library of Congress website. Nothing remarkable about the 1904 team, but the 1915 team was the first year that the Phillies made the playoffs. I am going to retouch the photo and upload it soon. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:44, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I also wondered if it would make sense to have any introductory text at the start of the four major sections (Individual career records, Individual single-season records, Team single-game records, and Team season records. For example the team season records might also mention playoffs or World Series appearances, or the Team single game records might mention who the opponenets were for some of the records. Just an idea.
- I could definitely do some mini-leads since this is divided up into sections; I don't know what I would write to add substance to the list. I'm having a hard time deciding what to put in there. Suggestions? KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:44, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
There been a strong movement to remove date linking in articles - it is not required, but it is something to be aware of. Not sure if it will arise at FLC.
- Actually, in baseball articles, stand-alone years are supposed to be linked to the appropriate Major League baseball season or year in baseball article. I haven't seen anything like that pop up at FLC, but thanks for the heads-up! KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 22:44, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps, thanks for your recent peer review work Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 16:19, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Should be done now, either questions answered or problems addressed. When this closes, I think I will slide it on over to FLC. Thanks for all your input! KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 21:37, 3 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]