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Psycho-Pass: The Movie

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I've listed this article for peer review because I recently expanded this article but I have no idea if it's okay since I'm not experienced with movie articles. Should the reception be shorter to make more generalizations? I might nominate in the future once it's copyedited. Thanks, Tintor2 (talk) 11:54, 20 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Aoba47

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  • I would clarify in the lead that this film is related to the show Psycho-Pass. The show is not directly named and linked in the lead, and is only indirectly mentioned in the lead's final paragraph.
  • Yeah, it's kinda a sequel but I never realized it works as stand alone due to its accessibility. Still, added the link about Kogami's actions in the first series.
  • For this part, the storylines presented in the first television series, could you clarify what you mean by "the first television series"?
    • Revised
  • Could you clarify this part, and for ignoring an unfinished character arc, for me?
    • Revised
  • The WP:FUR for File:Psycho-Pass The Movie Visual.jpg is incomplete.
  • I do not think this sentence, On Yahoo! Japan, it has a score of 3.82 stars out of 5., is necessary. It does not really add much to the reader's understanding.
    • Removed. Thought it was kinda important like Rotten Tomatotes
  • The "Critical response" subsection looks good to me. The third and fourth paragraphs in particular have clear structures. The structure for the first and second paragraphs seem less clear to me. Could you explain your approach for these two paragraphs?
    • Revised. I noticed that most critics enjoyed the dynamic between the duo of Tsunemori and Kogami when commenting in the film, especially since they were already partners in the first television series. The second paragraph discusses the dystopia setting presented in the movie.
  • I would add ALT text for File:Robert McCollum.jpg. I'd make sure that all the images have appropriate ALT text.
    • Done
  • Shouldn't the Japanese titles in the citations have translations?
    • Done
  • I'd avoid having PSYCHO-PASS in all caps in the citation titles.
    • Done. Except an external link that uses capitals for some reason.

These are my comments so far. I hope they are helpful. As for the question you raised about the reception section, I do not think it is too long. The only question I have about is the structure of the first two paragraphs, but otherwise, it looks good to me. Aoba47 (talk) 04:37, 23 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • I am glad that I could help. Thank you for addressing everything. The article looks in good shape for a GAN. I noticed that you have a request for a WP:GOCE copy-edit, which is a good idea. Best of luck with this! Aoba47 (talk) 20:47, 23 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Link20XX

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Also placing this here for now. I will have comments soon. Link20XX (talk) 04:54, 22 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Here is a few basic comments:

  • In the infobox, the director, writer, and producers are separated by plainlist, but the voice actors are separated by br. They should use the same template and of those, I would recommend the former per MOS:NOBR
    • Done.
  • At least of me, the images of the voice actors in the Cast doesn't look very good or make much sense. Many of the other voice actors in both have images, so why just the two Japanese leads?
    • Moved Hanazawa and Seki to the Production section. I couldn't find anything about Funimation's actors other than how they were received by the critics with Kate Oxley not having even an article so I don't know what I should add. You suggest adding Nojima even if he is a supporting character.
  • Is information about the commercial performance in "Box office and sales" worth mentioning? I feel this is better left for an article on the song itself or perhaps its album or band
    • Removed.
  • This is not something I would be strict about in a GA review, but the reception section follows the A said B structure outlined at WP:RECEPTION
    • Trimmed. I combined some to make generalizations but kept some that shared a different reaction or stand out the most.

Those are my first comments. If I have any more I will add them below. Link20XX (talk) 00:02, 24 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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