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I've listed this article for peer review because… the formating is very off and the actual page contains many misc. additions that through off the entire article. Thanks, Fonsit (talk) 05:38, 27 January 2020 (UTC)
- Comments by paul2520
Hi, Fonsit, and thanks for nominating this article. I see you are a newer editor, so my assumption is you'd like some direction for improving the article. Great!
I did some editing. I noticed several places that are missing references. I marked a few with the citation needed template. That might be tricky if you didn't write the original article... but you could try and find them via Google/JSTOR/other scholarly databases, or by reaching out to the original article author (however, they appear to not be active, so you might post at Wikipedia:WikiProject Psychology).
I also replaced one duplicate reference call with a named reference. See here for that edit. I think there is at least one more case of this; do you think you could fix that?
I think some redesign of the way the studies are presented is warranted. For example, the first study mentioned is one in Germany, which looks interesting. But does it really merit being the first in this article? I wonder if the section titles might be better worded, like "Education as cause of intelligence" instead of using the word "causal". Likewise, I don't like the second line, "It is correct to say that higher level of education leads to greater level of intelligence and also true the other way around, however, it does not apply for every situation." That's vague, so I've tagged it as such.
This page seems much shorter than I would expect! I'm sure a few books (possibly with the title The Psychology of Education or similar) could be linked in a Bibliography or Further reading section.
What do you think? Is this enough to get you started improving the article? = paul2520 (talk) 17:28, 8 February 2020 (UTC)
- Possible merge?
Hi again, Fonsit. I actually just saw there's a separate, and much more developed article Educational psychology. What do you think about proposing a merge, and posting about it at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Psychology? = paul2520 (talk) 17:34, 8 February 2020 (UTC)
Hi Paul2520, thanks for the contributions. Yes, I was considering proposing a merge to that page as well, but I wanted to have a more seasoned editor's opinions first. Fonsit (talk) 20:22, 12 February 2020 (UTC)