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The writing needs improvement. Any feedback would be appreciated. It recieved decent support for promotion to FA but the writing was a dealbreaker.Cptnono (talk) 06:43, 30 December 2009 (UTC)
Thanks, Cptnono (talk) 06:43, 30 December 2009 (UTC)
- Oops. I didn't realize that I need to wait 14 days. Apologies for not reading the intro closer. this needs to be closed.Cptnono (talk) 08:54, 30 December 2009 (UTC)
- WP:PR/V has people willing to do copyedits. I have closed this per your request - it would be OK to reopen this in 14 days - ask if you do not know how to do that. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 13:39, 30 December 2009 (UTC)
I have reopened the PR as requested. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 17:20, 24 January 2010 (UTC)
- Awesome. Just to clarify, the primary goal of this PR is to get the writing up to the standards of FA. There has been another round of work done, but I don't want there to be any concerns upon its renomination. Any feedback is appreciated.Cptnono (talk) 01:23, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
Crimsonfox's Comments
- DAB Links Fix this one
- Lead
- I'm unsure of the capitalisation of "Event Center" - Is this the name of the place or just a loose description of it? I say this because in the second paragraph it is uncapitalised and then capitalised again in the "Funding" section.
- "It has seating for 67,000 fans." - Is it necessarily "fans" or just "people"?
- I think "MLS" be written out in full the first time it's used.
- Funding
- 2%, 10% and 20% should be written out in full
- Construction and Layout
- "fans with disabilities" - Again with "fans"
- Surface
- "a 1 inch" - 1 -> one
- "The slope of the field towards the sidelines (called the "crown") was also reduced to prevent balls from running towards the sidelines" - repetition of "sidelines" also "crown" should be in italics rather than quote marks.
- Football
- "Qwest Field was again the site for their wild card game" - Term "wild card game" - Is it an actual term?
- "match up between the powerhouses of Sammamish" - "powerhouses" seems unencyclopedic
I hope these comments help. I'll temp watch this PR if you have any questions. CrimsonFox talk 20:09, 30 January 2010 (UTC)
- Awesome. Thanks for the help. The only thing not changed was [Wild card (sports)]].Cptnono (talk) 08:15, 31 January 2010 (UTC)