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Rachel Bluwstein

I've just finished merging this article with what used to be at Rachel (poet). I'd appreciate a quick go-over to make sure I didn't leave any redundancies, also please express an opinion as to whether this would make a good featured article candidate. --woggly 07:53, 23 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It's pretty short for a featured article and needs considerable expansion. In the opening paragraph (the LEAD, add a paragraph giving an overview of her life and significance, something like "Born in Russia in XX, she immigrated to Palestine, where she became widely known for her poetry. Her collected works remain one of the most popular books sold in Israel." Kaisershatner 16:27, 23 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for a very nice merge. I was unaware of the page Rachel Bluwstein when I wrote Rachel (poet); my page is a translation of the Hebrew article, and since there was no interwiki mark there, and there was no article matching "Rachel Blubstein", I assumed the page did not exist. I made some fairly minor changes to your article; other than that, the page looks fine! --Zvika 18:39, 23 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Standards have been rising for featured article status. My suggestions if you wish to make WP:WIAFA:

Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.

The article will need references. See WP:CITE and WP:V for more information.

Please provide WP:CITE information for references/footnotes. See also WP:CITE/ES; templates like {{Cite web}} and {{Cite book}} may be useful here.
This article needs footnotes, preferably in the cite.php format recommended by WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with WP:CITE or WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add <div class="references-small"><references/></div>.

Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, years, decades, and centuries without full dates generally should not be linked. For example, January 2006 should not be linked, instead change it to January 2006. Also, please note WP:BTW and WP:CONTEXT, which state that years with full dates should be linked. For example, February 28, 2006, should be come February 28, 2006.

Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006, but do not link January 2006.
After a year, for consistency, a comma should either be used throughout the entire article or not used at all.

Please alphabetize the categories and interlanguage links.

Per WP:WIAFA, Images should have concise captions.

There may be an applicable infobox for this article. {{Template:Infobox Biography}} may be useful.

This article can use copyediting to ensure that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. For example,
- Rachel was born in Vyatka in Russia in Vyatka, Russia will reduce the extra "in"s
- ubable to return to Palestine unable
- where she worked teaching - where she worked as a teacher sounds a bit better to me
- and perhaps other copyediting fixes for grammar/spelling are needed.

There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- Rachel is considered one of the most popular and important modern Hebrew poets
- is/are weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations.
Thanks, AndyZ _t 19:42, 23 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]