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Rihanna 2006 Tour

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to promote Music of the Sun to Good Topic, but I doubt this article will be able to become GA. So according to the criteria, I am listing this for a Peer Review to solve any issues because nominating for Good Topic.

Thanks, Calvin • ^{Watch n' Learn} 22:38, 14 January 2012 (UTC)

Comments from Sp33dyphil

• Is the The suitable/necessary as the starting word in this case?
• "by Barbadian singer recording artist"
• "album, Music of the Sun, and" missing comma.
• "The tour supported her debut studio album, Music of the Sun and second studio album, A Girl Like Me.[1] The tour took place during the summer of 2006." --> "Taking place during the summer of 2006, the tour supported her debut studio album, Music of the Sun, and second studio album, A Girl Like Me.[1]"
• I'd prefer it if all the "(select dates)"s are left in their natural size so as to aid vision-impaired readers. But, it's your call.
• MOS calls for the inclusion of alt text.
• Be consistent with your date format. --Sp33dyphil ©^hat_ontributions 08:57, 2 February 2012 (UTC)

  Thanks. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 13:12, 3 February 2012 (UTC)