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Roger Crozier

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I'm hoping one day to turn this into a GA. I have expanded this article and I would greatly appreciate any tips on how to infinitely improve this article in any way.

Thanks, Heroman26 (talk) 00:10, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is far too short, check out WP:LEAD, it should be at least two weighty paragraphs summarising the article.
Image in the infobox could use a caption.
Year ranges (in the headings for example) should use an en-dash, not a hyphen, per WP:DASH.
"Roger Crozier was identified" no need to repeat Roger.
Apply WP:YEAR to the career section of the infobox.
Season year ranges should use en-dashes.
"In 1959-60, " links to a Memorial Cup article, too much Easter egg for me.
CPHL is a dab link.
"looked to bounce back" etc, reads like a tabloid paper.
Stats section could use compliance with MOS:DTT per WP:ACCESS so screen readers can read rows and columns (using row and col scopes).
Ref titles should use en-dashes were appropriate.
Succession boxes are awful, think about incorporating their "content" into the article.

The Rambling Man (talk) 20:15, 29 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Allright, thanks for your input. I'll go fix those things now. Heroman26 (talk) 17:44, 30 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]