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Solar system

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I've made some alterations since a previous peer review; please note that the referencing system is temporary and will be made more permanent once I have settled on a format for this article that I am happy with Serendipodous 20:14, 20 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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It looks decent, but I think there are a few areas in need of some improvement. Here are a few comments:
  • I think the introduction needs to be longer. It should cover, for example, the ecliptic, briefly state the current direction and velocity of motion of the system, and describe the overall angular motion of the system. (I.e. the direction of rotation and the distribution of angular momentum. I believe the planets have 99% of the angular momentum in the system.)
  • There needs to be a section specifically on the Sun, just as there is a section for each of the planets. This needs to mention, for example, that the Sun is a Population I star and discuss it's variability, and steady increase in luminosity as it ages.
  • "orbitting" => orbiting.
  • The sentence, "By remaining out of the spiral arms, Earth may be unusually free to form large animal life on its surface." needs a source cited. Right now it sounds like speculation.
  • "If Pluto were placed close to the Sun, it would develop a tail, as comets do." Is there a reference for this? I'm a little skeptical as Pluto has a considerably stronger gravitational field than a comet.
  • Although the result is fairly recent, some coverage of the Jupiter-Saturn orbital resonance would be good in the history section[1]
  • In the "Hypothetical planets" section, please convert the bulleted list into standard prose.
  • The page is in need of inline citations that use the appropriate citation templates.
Thanks! — RJH (talk) 21:21, 20 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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