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Space Shuttle Challenger disaster

There are only several FA's on the space program and this is one of the few that has a decent shot at becoming one. I became aware of this page while persuing a featured picture nomination and did some minor work on it. It has undergone some SERIOUS revisions over the last two months, so I figure it's time for some outside feedback. Palm_Dogg 03:15, 6 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It looks alright, and I agree with you that the article has a decent shot at becoming Featured, but there are several issues that need to be addressed. For starters, the mission table and the picture of Challenger’s disintegration should be switched so that the table is on top and the image below. Also, consider listing the crew and the mission control staff at the bottom of the page, rather than the top. If this is not possible then consider expanding the "Mission personnel and objectives" section so that it reads like entry and not like a list. The following images have no source information, or no link to their source information:

Lastly, consider placing more inline citations in the article if it is at all possible. TomStar81 03:54, 9 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Space Shuttle Challenger disaster

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