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Sportsperson of the Year (Czechoslovakia)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to nominate it for a Featured list. Before I do so, I would like to ask other Wikipedians to look at it and express their opinion.

Thanks, Jan.Kamenicek (talk) 22:08, 23 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In sports males and females usually compete in separate disciplines. I think it can be useful to see, whether the person got the trophy for achievements in a male or in a female discipline. In the lead there are also numbers of male and female trophy winners, the colours help the readers to check them. Jan.Kamenicek (talk) 06:25, 24 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement.

  • I am not sure that the color codes meet WP:ACCESS - might need to also have a symbol for men / women / pairs
    • I hope it does. I think the contrast is sufficient and it reads well. I would prefer colours to symbols, but if more people share this opinion, I can change it.
    • I had a look at it once more and I turned the colours lighter, so that the contrast is bigger. Now I think the text reads better. Jan.Kamenicek (talk) 20:32, 12 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I did some minor copyedits to the prose - if I introduced any errors or made things worse, please revert.
    • They were OK, thank you.
  • I would make the caption clearer - identify the sport (Artistic gymnast Věra Čáslavská ...) and perhaps mention here that she is the only four time recipient or that she won it the most times
    • Done.
  • Per the MOS, metric units should also have English units given (so fix things like World record of 65.22 m in Sokolov, Czechoslovakia) {{convert}} may help here
    • I think sports achievements are always written in metric units on the international level, but it makes no harm and so I added the convert template as well.
  • Watch stray commas like Summer Olympics in Barcelona, Spain – 1st,[57] (between 1st and [57])
    • Corrected.
  • In the Team awards, since the lead already said that all but one team awards were given to Czechoslovakia national teams, does it really need to say "Czechoslovakia national motorcycle team" for example? Could it just say "National motorcycle team" (we already know these are all Czechoslovakian teams).
  • Done.
  • Is there a reason why the team award was not given for several years? If this is known, could it be added?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:01, 6 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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