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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to know what I can do to make it better as a whole. I'm looking for advice, criticism and guidance to that end.
Thanks, Landiien (talk) 14:43, 14 October 2010 (UTC)
- Comments from Jappalang
- The lede is a summary of the article and should contain the basics of explaining the subject. There are various flaws found here. Stating "popular" in "... based on the popular Star Trek series ..." is needless and biased per WP:PEACOCK. Readers might not know what is Star Trek Nemesis. Furthermore, the lede fails to state what players do in this MMORPG, and the critical reactions to the game.
- Why is Setting a 3rd level header?
- "Every player is the captain of their own individual ship;"
- A real ship? A vessel that sits in the water? How generous of the game's producers to give them a real-life ship... Note: the tone of the comment is to highlight the issues that plague writing on virtual entertainment. Please differentiate real-life content from those of virtual simulation.
- "... but other factions unlock as players level up."
- Gaming jargon likely incomprehensible to non-gamers: please read WP:VG/GL about jargon.
- A video games article should explain clearly the core gameplay of the subject to its readers, allowing them to understand generally how the game is played. However, it is unnecessary to explain the miniscule details as found in the various subsections of Gameplay here. Is there a need for the table of races, tiers of equipment levels, etc? Not to mention the overflowing gaming jargon there... ("A Silent-buy Player Market" for example)
- What is with the table in Updates?
- Is that all on Reception?
- There are many unsourced statements; this is a major failing that stops me from looking into the article any further.
Please note that peer review "is intended for high-quality articles that have already undergone extensive work, often as a way of preparing a featured article candidate." It would have been better to seek suggestions on Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Video games or that Wikiproject's peer review. Jappalang (talk) 01:53, 20 October 2010 (UTC)