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I've listed this article for peer review because this artical has evoved many times and i want to known how to make it possibly a GA.
Thanks, Pedro J. the rookie 00:22, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
Comments from Liquidluck (talk)
- There are too many quotes in the Ambiguous sexuality section. Paraphrase some of them into prose. Read over WP:QUOTE.
- In the "Bertram" section, you mention Bertram is only seen in "these episodes", but do not list which episodes. If Bertram only appears in Emission Impossible, giving him an entire section may be WP:UNDUE weight.
- The Other appearances section reads like a trivia list. Change the list into prose.
- Is it possible to have a section title other than "Write"? I didn't check if that was a recent change/vandalism, but if it isn't, do make the title more descriptive- or change it to "Books", "Novelizations", or "Writing".
Hope that helps! Liquidluck (talk) 01:25, 21 August 2009 (UTC) More comments:
- Many of the references are bare URLs. Make sure to use WP:Citation templates to source items.
- Although the "Other appearances" section is now in prose, it is entirely unsourced. Unsourced statements are bad, and unsourced quotes are worse. You can cite episodes using this template.
- Is there information related to Seth MacFarlane available? Also, a free picture of MacFarlane, if available, would be very useful. Liquidluck (talk) 20:29, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
Hi, I just cleaned up the article a bit, some comments:
Development
- Try to cite each sentence; don't place five refs at the end of a paragraph, the info is usually unclear and GA and FA reviewers don't really like ref bunches.
- The development section should contain info about the creation of the character, not the show.
Reception
- This section should contain info about the reception of the character, not the show.
- Try to seperate the section into three paragraphs (not subsections, paragraphs): Awards and Accomodations, positive reception and, if you can find any, negative reception. If a lot of critcs enjoy a certain aspect of the character, his voice for instance, you could create a seperate paragraph for that.
General comments
- Cite each ref!
- Don't use ISO for the dates and don't shorten month names.
- Don't just print texts in bold letters, films, tv series, and books etc. should be in italic.
- You can check other Family Guy GAs for possible refs.
All these comments could also be useful for the Brian Griffin article. That's all, good luck with editing.--Music26/11 15:28, 24 August 2009 (UTC)