Wikipedia:Peer review/Sunshine Coast Grammar School/archive1
I just wondering how I'd go about improving this article. Any feed back would be welcomed. RockerballAustralia 02:43, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 19:10, 22 November 2006 (UTC)
My two cents: it's a stubby, poorly referenced, and grammatical error-filled article.
- Expand!
- In-line citations are necessary to go anywhere.
- Watch your grammar and spelling!
- its and it's are not the same thing.
- Encyclopedic tone needs to be established. It reads somewhat like an ad.
- You talk more about the athletic program then the actual scholastic program. Tell us what the school offers and some facts and figures.
- Why is this a notable school?
- Is this a vanity page, it appears so. See WP:VANITY and WP:NOT.
- Sorry if you take my comments as insulting, but it seriously needs work. I'll gladly help out. By your username, I guess you either live by this school/go to this school/work at this school/have children that go to this school (check 1). If any are true, it will be easy for you to get more information. If you let me have access to that info, I'll gladly intigrate it into the article for you. Drop a line if you accept the offer. Good luck with the article. Evan(Salad dressing is the milk of the infidel!) 01:54, 23 November 2006 (UTC)