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I've listed this article for peer review because… I've just created this article and I would like to take it all the way to FA status. But let's concentrating on working on GA first :)
Any suggestions or comments you have are much appreciated.
Thanks, Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 08:40, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
Will do Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:24, 29 August 2008 (UTC)
- Thank you. One of my concerns, which I should have put above I guess, is whether or not the article needs a cast section and a plot section (though as a non-fiction piece, would it be called plot?) The article assessment from WP:FILM says so, but I'm not too sure. Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 07:10, 29 August 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- There seems to be too much empahsis in the lead on the producers etc. (the second paragraph) compared to the amount of text in the article itself WP:WEIGHT
- The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
- I think the direct quotes from reviews in the lead need to be cited - see WP:LEAD and WP:MOSQUOTE
- I do think a "Summary" section (plot) would be useful. Agree that calling it "Plot" seems odd though.
- Also think a Cast section would help.
- There are a few typos I saw - I read for comprehension, not proofreading. Here is a rough sentence When the documentary aired in the UK, overnight viewing figures showed that it was watched by 600,000 viewers, and by 3% of the total television audience.[27] I would say something like ... 600,000 viewers, which was 3 percent ... You can ask for a copyedit at WP:PRV
- I do not review film GAs, but this seems pretty good for GA to me - well cited, mostly well written.
- There were a few places that seem to be needlessly repetitious, alhtough they may be for emphasis - the camera may be taken as a sign the owner is a terrorist, for example.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:08, 30 August 2008 (UTC)