Wikipedia:Peer review/The Day After/archive1
The article is about a relatively groundbreaking and well known television film. Article's developed into a rather in depth representation of the film, its background, and its reception. Any comments, criticisms, and contributions are appreciated. Volatile 05:44, 8 November 2005 (UTC)
- You provide a comprehensive account of the circumstances that lead to war in the movie, but the description of the plot itself is rather slim. This might give people the idea that the movie spends a lot of time on the geopolitics, which I don't recall it doing. The end of the "Situation Presented" section should go under "Reaction." I really like the "Production" setting, although I'm sure some others will call for more bluelinks. You also need a spoiler warning. -- Mwalcoff 02:29, 9 November 2005 (UTC)
- You've done a very nice job so far. Here's what I would suggest:
- The intro needs to be at least two good-sized paragraphs.
- The plot points in the "Situations presented" section should be in prose. I think simply taking out the bullets will be fine as they already read well.
- Inline citations are needed.
- The see also section is rather unnecessary. If this were going up on FAC the suggestion to move See Also to separate lists would be given.
- Some more images would be nice, even if they are just pics of people involved such as Carl Sagan and William F. Buckley. Pics would help to break up the copy.
- I hope these are helpful! *Exeunt* Ganymead Dialogue? 06:20, 9 November 2005 (UTC)
- There are several images on www.lawrence.com of locations in Lawrence, Kansas made up by the filmmakers to look like they've been devastated by a nuclear blast, including one of the scenes described in the "Production" section where the storefronts are knocked out, etc., etc.
- Thank you both for your suggestions. I'll work on those when I have time this week. Anything else you can think of is greatly appreciated. Volatile 15:41, 9 November 2005 (UTC)