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I've listed this article for peer review because… I decided to take over the GA nomination after the main contributor decided to retire. The article has been copyedited twice, and I wonder what else could be done for a possible FA promotion.
Thanks, igordebraga ≠ 02:02, 11 July 2013 (UTC)
Comments by NRP
It needs another round of copyediting by someone with EN-5 skills. In particular, there are some grammar problems that use the construction "with <noun> <verb>ing", such as "with Campbell being run over" and "with Campbell running down a hill". You can get some helpful tips from User:Tony1/Noun_plus_-ing. There's also some passive voice used, but WP:MOS tells us not to obsess over fixing that. So, it's probably fine. Other than that, I don't see any obvious areas that need improvement. NinjaRobotPirate (talk) 02:46, 13 July 2013 (UTC)