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I've listed this article for peer review because a lot of work has gone into this article I would like any comments or suggestions that would help it get promoted to GA status.
Thanks, J.D. (talk) 14:34, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
- Comments by Jappalang
- Dablinks (toolbox on right) shows the Scrooge link as a disambiguation; please fix it.
- Checklinks shows http://www.rollingstone.com/reviews/movie/5948705/review/5948706/the_game as a dead link; please fix as well.
Plot
- "he remains haunted by seeing his father commit suicide on his 48th birthday by jumping off the roof of the family's home"
- Not really sure what to make of this sentence. How about "he is haunted by the imagery of his father's suicide, which he witnessed."
- "Nicholas finds the game is real, which starts to put his business, reputation, finances, and safety at risk."
- How?
- "... and also comes under risk."
- Like?
- "... and fire upon them."
- With what? I know what "fire upon" means but I suspect it is a slang term (for firearm-related action) that is unlikely encyclopaedic. Also note the sudden incongruity of having game company employees shoot people; is there a better way to segue this information into the plot?
- "... until he learns the truth."
- What truth? Is it really the truth? Or do you mean "until she tells him the truth behind the game."
- "Christine realizes that Nicholas' gun is not a prop, as CRS was unaware of its presence."
- Does this sentence matter in the scheme of the whole summary?
Production
- "The Game began as a spec screenplay, ..."
- What is a spec screenplay
- "... who put the project in turnaround, ..."
- What does that mean?
- "Fincher intended to make The Game before Seven but when Brad Pitt became available that project took priority."
- I believe this can be ambiguous: "that project" refers to which? Can this sentence be rephrased as well? How was Pitt's availability a factor in prioritising Seven?
- "However, the actress had a scheduling conflict with the Robert Zemeckis film Contact and could not appear in The Game."
- The first part of the sentence suggest she would not join Contact, I think this should be rephrased, like "However, the actress was about to act in Robert Zemeckis' Contact and could not fit The Game into her schedule."
- "Deborah Kara Unger's auditioned for the role of Christine with test reel consisting of a two-minute sex scene from David Cronenberg's Crash."
- Something is wrong with this sentence (possessives and noun-gerund constructs).
- "... once Nicholas' left his protective world, ..."
- Again the possessives...
- "... known as ENR ..."
- Any way to get the full terminology than just presenting it as an acronym? Is there a Wikipedia article on this? Is there some reliable source that explains what this is?
- "The scene where Nicholas' taxi drives into the San Francisco Bay was shot near the Embarcadero with the close-up of Douglas trapped in the back seat filmed on a soundstage at Sony Pictures studio in a large tank of water."
- I think this is a run-on sentence, which can be effectively split into two.
Reception
- Effectively, it comprises a paragraph and two separate sentences... and the paragraph is mainly quotes. I would prefer a more thematic reception where key points of the reviewers are grouped.
Images
- File:TheGame poster323.jpg
- Was this image self-taken or from a website? Refer to WP:CITE#IMAGE for image source requirements. Furthermore, "This is a promotional poster for the movie this article describes" is a bit bare for a fair use rationale (the standard boilerplate 10-pointer is not much better). Consider beefing it up.
I am not certain but I get left with a feeling that there might be more to this film than what we have. Perhaps there is simply not enough information covered by reliable sources, but I think currently the article give a slightly more than bare bones feel. This might be unresolvable (and thus moot) if there are no more reliable sources that cover this film. Jappalang (talk) 01:16, 28 August 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for all of your hard work! There isn't much more reliable sources that I could find. Hopefully, the long-rumored special edition DVD that the Criterion Collection might do will have substantial extras that will shed more light on this film.--J.D. (talk) 19:11, 30 August 2010 (UTC)