Wikipedia:Peer review/The Happy Land/archive1

The Happy Land

A short, but detailed article, bringing together period newspaper articles, peer-reviewed articles, and one internet source by a noted scholar of W.S. Gilbert expanding on his three-page treatment in one of his books, as well as slight use of the primary source to get a cast list and plot summary put together. I'd like to get this to GA, then FA: What d'ye think needs done? Adam Cuerden ^talk 18:19, 2 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 09:04, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]