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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like it to get GA. However, I believe that it still needs some improvement.
Thanks, Perseus8235 18:12, 13 February 2011 (UTC)
Here are some comments:
- The lead should be expanded per WP:LEAD
- There are a few places in which the article mentions the so-called "Camp Half-Blood" series. What is this? How does this book relate to the series?
- If there is any additional information available, the Sequel section should be expanded to include it.
- "The story is narrated by Jason Grace, then Piper McLean, then Leo Valdez repeatedly, each character telling two chapters. The book has 56 chapters" If each character tells two chapters, and there are three main characters, then there should be only six chapters total. Something is not right here.
- The article should include a section titled Themes (or something along those lines).
I won't be watching this page, but feel free to leave a note on my talk page if you need any clarification. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 17:27, 18 February 2011 (UTC)