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The X Factor (Australia season 3)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to nominate it for GA. But firstly, I would like some feedback on the article for any improvements.

Thanks, Oz ^talk 10:41, 1 December 2011 (UTC)

I read the article and it's about time that it is promoted because it is too good to be a Start class articles. The amount of details it provides is very good.--Vyom25 (talk) 14:58, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

Thank you. Do you have any feedback for me? :) Oz ^talk 22:54, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

I think if the photographs of other 2 judges if available should be added. Or you can remove the photographs of the 2 judges which are already included and substitute that with a group photograph of all the contestants if available. Otherwise in the matter of content I don't think anything is missing.--Vyom25 (talk) 07:29, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

Done. Thank you for your feedback. Oz ^talk 00:29, 12 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Avoid bold links in the start, no need for The X Factor to be bold here. Done
• Broadcast dates in the infobox need a spaced en-dash, not an unspaced en-dash. Done
• Three dabs, Rob Thomas, Aspergers, Someone Like You, need to be fixed. Done
• "is split" now it's finished, shouldn't this be "was split"? Done
• Try to be consistent with referencing in the lead. Some info is referenced, but, say, the whole final para of the lead is unreferenced. Done
• "In season 2011" ->" In the 2011 season" Done
• "having originally been" -> "having previously been". Done
• While not strictly required for GA, you could think about WP:ACCESS and not simply use colour to convey information, e.g. in the table where you use blue green and pink for 1st, 2nd and 3rd place, consider using a different symbol as well for each one.
  • Theres a key above the table to explain what those colours are for. See The X Factor (UK series 7) for example. Oz ^talk 04:38, 13 December 2011 (UTC)
    • That's not the point. If someone can't distinguish one colour from another, a colour-only key is of no use. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:06, 13 December 2011 (UTC)
      • Added symbols. Oz ^talk 07:16, 14 December 2011 (UTC)
• A lot of "he cites" "she cites", shouldn't this be past tense? In any case, it's a little tedious to read this on every line... Done
• No need for Rugby League to be capitalised. Done
• "She regularly performs..." does she still do that? Or was that just prior to the competition? Added past tense. It was prior to the competition. Oz ^talk 00:29, 13 December 2011 (UTC)
• "they've recorded" avoid contractions. Done
• Similar WP:ACCESS comment applies to the big results summary table. Done
• In fact, you use row and col scopes in the subsequent table, but not the summary table. You should be consistent and use these throughout for screen readers. Done
• Are the blue and pink colours in the tables explained somewhere in a key?
  • Yes. Oz ^talk 00:29, 13 December 2011 (UTC)
    • Same comment applies about symbols and colours being used together for WP:ACCESS. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:07, 13 December 2011 (UTC) Done
• "Judges' vote to eliminate[49]" you don't put the reference in a consistent location for these sections (at least, not for Week 4). Done
• "made comments towards" probably made comments "about" the other judges. Done
• "More controversy erupted " reads a bit tabloidy.
  • Fixed. Oz ^talk 00:29, 13 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Another contestant Luke O'Dell appeared" feels like there are a couple of commas missing here. Done
• "The premiere episode on 29 August 2011, topped the nights overall " take the comma and turn it into an apostrophe, i.e. "The premiere episode on 29 August 2011 topped the night's overall " Done
• "nights overall ratings.[86]" apostrophe. Done
• Don't see a good reason to have the ratings table in slightly smaller font nor with that format of table, just keep the tables consistent (it looks like there are at least three styles being used here which is unsightly).
  • Should I format the table like this? Oz ^talk 00:29, 13 December 2011 (UTC)
    • Well that's better. The biggest issue in this article is the variety of table formats. Pick one and stick with it and make sure it's accessible. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:08, 13 December 2011 (UTC) Done
• Maybe my browser but the "Notes" under the Rating table have a large space between ratings and position. Perhaps you're inadvertantly using columns?
  • Fixed. Oz ^talk 01:03, 14 December 2011 (UTC)
• For references which are Yahoo!7's X Factor ones, shouldn't "The X Factor Australia." be a work, i.e. in italics? (as you have in the External links section)... Done

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:09, 12 December 2011 (UTC)