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I've listed this article for peer review because I add a lot of reliable sources and there are some sources but outside of sources, I also add my best on the lead section and every section and the infobox. Someone also add the cover art for the game which is for the article. The article also got C-class and I think this article should be higher than that so is there any improvement for this article. NatwonTSG2 (talk) 18:48, 24 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720

Comments after a quick skim:

Second paragraph in "Development and release" needs a citation at the end.
Reception falls into the "X says Y" pattern. Read WP:RECEPTION for tips on how to avoid this.

Hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 02:43, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Okay so I replaced the [people/websites] said/saying something but there only one of there in the reception section and the "Development and release", I forget to a references to the second paragraph while originally second and third were the same paragraph before I found more details to the development section. NatwonTSG2 (talk) 13:48, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Is there any improvement for the article? NatwonTSG2 (talk) 23:05, 13 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by QuicoleJR

The critic reviews in the Reception section are "X said Y" or the extremely similar "X of Y said Z". This is too repetitive, and should be fixed.
Additionally, the whole article could use a copyedit to fix the grammar. I would recommend requesting help from the Guild of Copy Editors.

QuicoleJR (talk) 18:17, 25 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]