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I've listed this article for peer review because after spending quite some time editing the article, having it go through a GA review and a copyedit, I would like to prep it for a Featured Article candidacy. Any feedback is much appreciated :^)
Thanks, Soulbust (talk) 04:46, 9 July 2017 (UTC)
- Hello, Soulbust! Going for the four award I suspect?
- First of all, pictures have no alt text. This is quite a problem, because alt text is used for users unable to read the text and using other means e.g. listening to the article.
- Second of all, you should really make a "See also" section. It will help interested users continue reading.
- And lastly, you should probably move the real name part into the lead as it is done with other characters with pseudonyms (Darth Vader, Black Widow (Natasha Romanova), e.g.).
Hope you succeed! Cheers, FriyMan Per aspera ad astra 17:11, 20 July 2017 (UTC)
Suggestions on where to start:
- Reduce overquoting throughout. Almost all of the quotes would be better off paraphrased, which lets you vary your sentence structure more too for FA-quality prose
- Combine and reduce subsections in the Appearances section (oversectioning)
- Parts like the character's "real name" and "country of origin" are all fictional, in-universe detail. Needs to be rewritten for out-of-universe tone with almost all of the lore/plot details clearly described as fictional elements, not "real".
- You'll want to get a few ce passes on this before FAC—quite a few clunky sentences
