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Transcortical sensory aphasia

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I have been working with a group to better this article, transcortical sensory aphasia, as part of a project for our neuroscience class. We would greatly appreciate any and all feedback on how to achieve "Good Article" status.

Thanks, --Quallsk (talk) 04:14, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments - no expert in the area but can provide a technical review.

• I don't think a link to "speech" is needed, that's a fairly basic word given the complex nature of this article.
• " and naming" what do you mean by this?
• "exhibit paraphasia. [2]" remove space before ref.
• "However, transcortical sensory aphasia..." you've already abbreviated it, so use TSA here. Apply hereinafter.
• "repetition of words. [3]" remove space before ref. Check others.
• "beginning speech therapy. Speech therapy methods" try to avoid the quick repetition of phrases like "speech therapy".
• Brain caption needs a period (it's a complete sentence).
• " heard.[1] [5]" avoid spaces between refs.
• " e.g. when " just me, but I'd prefer "for instance" over "e.g."
• Last sentence of Verbal comprehension section is unreferenced.
• "or uses words in " - "or use words in"
• Last three sentences of Imaging are unreferenced.
• "does not appear overnight" - takes a significant period of time, or something, this "overnight" speak is a wee bit colloquial.
• Wernicke's caption could be expanded a little to make it interesting and useful.
• You don't need to relink aphasia again, and I'm sure you don't need to link brain by this point.
• motor centers.[18] [19] - avoid spaces between refs
• Don't need See also for articles that you've already linked in this article (e.g. Aphasia etc).
• Ref 3 and ref 19 need an en-dash in the page range (per WP:DASH)
• Don't mix date format in the refs, DMY or MD,Y but be consistent.
• Refs 8, 9, 11 and 12 appear to have bare URLs, that will need to be addressed.

The Rambling Man (talk) 12:46, 16 December 2011 (UTC)