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Transformation of the Ottoman Empire

This is a new article I've written on a very important topic for Ottoman history, I'm interested in knowing if people find it readable and informative, what deficiencies it might have, and what it might need in order to reach good article status. Given how it's a new article, there's no particular section that needs special attention, rather the article as a whole.

Thanks, Chamboz (talk) 23:37, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

Comments by Dig deeper

I made some edits to the article, mainly to the lead section. Looks very good overall. Well referenced. Good images. My only recommendation would be to consider moving Political narrative and Government topics near the top. These topics tell a story and are more engaging than things like demographics and economy.Dig Deeper (talk) 23:49, 6 December 2016 (UTC)

Comments from AustralianRupert

G'day, nice work with this article. I only took a very brief look, sorry, as the topic isn't one I know anything about (I have advertised this peer review now on a few different Wikiprojects, so hopefully someone else will come along and offer some comments that are more insightful than mine). Anyway, I have the following suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 03:31, 9 January 2017 (UTC)

• there are a few areas where the referencing could be improved, for instance:
  • this appears uncited: "A naval campaign led to the capture of Tunis from the Spanish in 1574, and a truce was signed in 1580."
  • same as above, the sentence beginning: "Following the dramatic demographic growth of the sixteenth century..."
  • same as above, the sentence beginning: "After the outbreak of the Khmelnytsky Rebellion in 1648 Cossack..."
  • same as above: "Due to the increasing role of imperial women in political life, this period is sometimes referred to as the Sultanate of Women."
  • same as above, the last part of the first two paragraphs in the Crisis and adaptation sub-section
  • same as above, "The push for territorial expansion under the Köprülüs reached its apex in 1683 with the Siege of Vienna, which ended in Ottoman defeat."
• "1541–68" (and various other date range renderings): following a change at MOS:DATERANGE, this should now be "1541–1568"
• "File:Seyh-ül-Islâm.jpg": I suggest cropping the black border off this image to make it more visually appealing
• Anyway, that's it from me. Thanks for your efforts and good luck with taking the article further. (I believe that it would have a good shot at GA so long as you can get a thorough peer review). Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 03:31, 9 January 2017 (UTC)