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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been put together in a manner that is fully referenced and makes use of all available sources. It would be good to see it go on to GA review, but first of all it requires a peer review.
Thanks, Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:28, 24 December 2012 (UTC)
Cast should be mentioned somewhere along the line. I prefer to see it in the plot section (as can be seen here or here). If there's good information on the casting process, etc, then you could go with a standalone cast section (like this), but I'm not keen on them without real-world info to flesh them out.Not sure "anti-conventional" shouldn't just be "unconventional" (while I'm at it, I've never seen "lambaste" with that E, but Chrome's spellcheck seems to say it's ok so I'm probably worried over nothing).- I've changed it to "anti-establishment" rather than "anti-conventional". I don't think "unconventional" really describes the particular scene. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:07, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
Link to Isle of Sheppey?Probably best to go with "double" rather than 'single' quotes on "The Divine David".A book is titled, rather than entitled (it doesn't hold an entitlement to something. Unless it's been a very good book, I guess. Who's to stop it?). Same goes for the farewell show.A quick qualifier on who Westwood is might be useful—just replacing "and then for Vivienne Westwood" with "and then for punk designer Vivienne Westwood" should be enough.- Didn't she pretty much give up on being a punk in 1980, becoming "post-punk" or something ? I'll just call her a designer for now. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:40, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
"but insisted that all he needed was a 30 minute break"—is this just one break or a break before each day/take/scene?"he felt that it was "quite hectic but a great atmosphere""—might be a good idea to slap an interpolation in there, and make it "he felt that it was "quite hectic but [had] a great atmosphere"".If there's nothing else under "Release" except the home media stuff, I don't see the need for two headings; just drop "release" and bring "home media" to a higher heading level- Added a bit more to that section. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:40, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
I think the reception sections leans a bit heavily on quotes; some of them could be truncated or paraphrased to better effect.Images could do with some alt text.- Overall this is a pretty decent article, certainly enough to make GA with ease. I'll have to point an old flatmate to the film, too, as it sounds right up his street. I tried looking for a few extra sources for you (AllRovi, BFI) but didn't find anything; given its themes I don't know if there's maybe any LGBT magazines or websites that might have covered it too (though the scope is well-balanced so you're not in any real need of extra reviews or the like if they don't exist). GRAPPLE X 00:51, 13 January 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks Grapple! Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:42, 13 January 2013 (UTC)